Revision Process:
When I first started writing the Writing Project # 1, I was super confused on what the
idea of it was. I didn't know what I was going to write about but once I
got going, I knew exactly where I was heading with this paper. I
finished my first draft and was extremely happy with it. Although I was pretty
happy with it, something still seemed off so I went into the writing
center. It was my first time going there so I didn't really know what to
expect. Jasmine was the person I had my meeting with and she made me
realize that my paper could definitely be improved. My paper confused
her in a couple places and I knew that my other readers would be
confused too. I made sure I added more detail so that it was clear
what I was talking about. She also gave me a couple tips on what I could
possibly expand on just to make my paper stronger than it already was.
When I was actually revising, I noticed that my paper could use a lot
more visual detail so that the reader could picture themselves in my
story. I also made sure to add more visual details. After adding,
deleting, and changing things, I was finally content with my second
draft/final paper. I was glad we got two drafts to revise as opposed to
one because if you didn't like how the first draft turned out, you could
always make changes to make it better. Revising my paper multiple times
definitely added strength to my paper.
Overall Experience: When this paper was first introduced, I had mixed emotions about it. I
was confused as to what was expected of us, even after reading the
examples in the book. I just think it needed to be explained more
thoroughly. Other than that, when I decided what I wanted to write
about, I thought about how cool this paper could actually be. I was
making things harder on myself than they needed to be. This paper was
basically telling a story of a moment that had a big impact on your
life but there was a concept behind the story. The other part of the
paper required the concept to be explained in your words and then use
two outside sources to explain the concept. The whole paper was brought
together by synthesizing your idea of the concept with the ideas used in
your outside sources. I was walking back to my room after class one day
and decided I wanted to write about the concept of love. My design
plan/outline was originally made based on this idea. Throughout the
process, I didn't change my mind on my topic. I felt that I had a very
strong topic and there was a lot that could be said. I believe that both
my concept and my paper were strong. When composing this paper, I
believe I accomplished what I set out to do. I wanted to let my reader
know what I thought the concept of love was and I believe I was able to
do that in my paper by using visual detail and a personal narrative. I
made sure to include as much detail as I could so that my reader wasn't
confused on what happening in both the story and the rest of the paper. I believe that by using a recurring
symbol in the story, the idea of my paper would be better understood. I
chose to compare a diamond and love because a diamond is one of the
strongest rocks and love is one of the strongest forces, it is also very beautiful.
Revision Process:
When I started writing the Writing Project # 2, I was torn between two
topics but I felt like cannabis was a topic that many people know about
but don't know the effects it has on the body. I wrote out my paper and
thought it was such a great paper and that I was finished with it. It
turns out I didn't use my sources correctly and I pretty much
plagiarized over half of my paper. I didn't use quotations where I
needed to, which obviously wasn't a good decision on my part. I was
planning on just going over my paper and putting quotations around every
quote and using my sources properly but my professor told me that most
of my paper was quotes and for this assignment only about 20% of my
paper could be quotes. So I figured it would be easier to start from
scratch and rewrite my paper on cheerleading. I will inform my readers
on what cheerleading is and why it is a sport, even though many people
believe it isn't. This revision process is by far the most revising I've
ever had to do (literally the whole paper) but I am glad I learned what
I did wrong so that it won't happen again for this paper. Overall, it
has been a learning experience.
Overall Experience:
My overall experience with this paper was a learning experience. At
first, I set out to write a paper about cannabis and what it is and also
explain its effects. I thought it was a great paper and I was pretty
proud about it. Unfortunately, it turned out to be more of a research
paper as opposed to an informer synthesis essay. I didn't use my sources
properly and I pretty much plagiarized almost my entire paper. After
having a meeting with my professor, I decided that the best plan for me
was to start from scratch and write about another topic. I decided to
write about cheerleading. I chose this topic because I am very familiar with what cheerleading is, what it teaches, and its advantages. I was also
able to incorporate the negative side by talking about injuries. The
reason I know so much about cheer is because I cheered for four years
in high school. Many people say that cheerleading isn't a sport and
there is nothing more annoying than people saying that to a cheerleader.
I decided to explain how cheerleading IS a sport in my paper. I had fun
writing this paper because I felt like I would finally be able to
convince people that cheer is a sport. I did so by using sources,
personal experience, and background knowledge on the sport. I learned
how to use my sources properly (I hope) and I was able to make this
paper my own as opposed to my sources being "louder" than my own words.
However, I didn't think it would be so difficult to explain something
about a topic that I am so familiar with. I sat on my bed and thought
about what I would say for a good while. I decided to say that cheer is a
sport because it teaches life values, just like any other sport. I also
mentioned that cheerleaders are also getting scholarships awarded to
them too and not just common sports like football and basketball.
Lastly, I talked about the risks that cheerleaders go through everyday at practice. I am not saying that other sports aren't dangerous. But if
cheer wasn't a sport, why is it considered the most dangerous sport for
women? Although I did not end up going with my original design plan and
outline, I did my absolute best to explain how cheerleading is a sport
and I had a great time doing so.
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